Introduction- I changed the opening sentence of my introduction, better introduced my sources, and changed the wording of my claim.  Overall I pretty much rewrote my entire introduction.

Evidence and explanation- I clarified all connections from evidence to my claim.  For an example, in my third paragraph I quoted from Jordan in my first draft when she discusses one guys forgettable mouthing off.  In my final draft I explained why this wasn’t just proof of “mushfake”, but why it proves “mushfake” to be not enough.

Reorganization-  I shuffled a few ideas around from after quotes to before quotes to better set up the quote.  By doing so I prevented my paragraphs from jumping into quotes as they did in my first draft.

New Paragraphs:  In my final draft I added a paragraph right after the introduction to explain partial acquisition compared to true acquisition.  This paragraph set up the rest to show that Gee based his combination around the idea that people can only partially acquire a discourse, which in turn creates holes in is combination of “mushfake”, metaknowledge and resistance.